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Arashi Commision Lineart by Kanadesonya Arashi Commision Lineart by Kanadesonya
Long Awaited Commision for :iconarashi-howaito: she;s been waiting for months on this and its gotten so old that there are a few errors to the image first of al the details smudged hence i was unable to make out what is the thing im linearting,secondly the mecha hand is a bit out of shape and finally you can tell some of the lines arent connected.So besides these three errors i think it looks okay.Arashi note me if theres any changes you want me to make or if you want it colored.
Medium:Sakura Mircon Pens,Mech Pencil,Eraser
The girl sitting on the throne with all the guns is her OC Arashi [link] i gave her mecha hands cuz she lost her real one the theme was royalty to me then theres clockwork beneath her so she's suspended in midair,the throne is midair i guess i gave her a sort of abstract dimension the girl who has covered eyes besides her is one of her Dolls or robots i didnt remember who is suspended with her gears she has bladed wings that i totally failed at.Enjoy
It's rather admirable that you have created that detailed piece of art. I wouldn't be able to do that with my limited patience xD

However, it needs some concentration to be able to "read" this, since the background with darker lines catches the eye more easily than the main subjects of the work that are much grayer. This is quite a shame, since you have paid so much effort to the details! A background with less eye-catching pattern could draw the attention to the foreground better and/or using darker/thicker lines with the main subjects.

Also, highlighting the main subjects would ease "reading" the picture overall. Now there is so much details that it is difficult to see where to pay attention or where are the borders of different elements. For example, I do see two girls there, but then I need to zoom closer to be able to where are their arms, as there are no differences between the thicknesses of the lines in the pattern and the lines of the outer lines of the sleeve. I also missed the guns you mentioned in the comments.

When you do something like this next time, I recommend you to figure out what are the most important elements of the artwork and them bring them out, so the watcher can tell them apart more quickly. Otherwise you lose great deal of effort into the ocean of details! If you have GIMP or Photoshop or a similar image editing program, I recommend you to try to learn using Brightness&Contrast tool. It's really handy for making black'n'white works crisp! First maximize the contrast, then adjust the brightness until it looks nice C:
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Sweetillita Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Dear are you still up for the request? :3
Kanadesonya Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yes ^^
Sweetillita Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yay! :hug:
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Submitted on
November 13, 2012
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MP280 series
MP Navigator EX 4.0